Precious Memories

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Crystal
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Re: Precious Memories

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Leon Karnak is the name of the tower Leon was sealed in. I can see how it would seem that way.

Maybe it's just my writing skills not being that great but I still can't see what's wrong with it. D:
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Re: Precious Memories

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Oh ok! I didn't know anything about the tower (never played Rune Factory games), so I was like "wtf is Leon Karnak? First name, last name?" XD sorry about the confusion on my part! :P

Maybe phrase it like "A man once sealed in the Leon Karnak tower" or something, make it clearer for those of us who have no knowledge of the RF series? ^_^
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Re: Precious Memories

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Yeah I may have to rewrite those. I used the descriptions directly from the game so I guess it could be confusing to those who have never played a Rune Factory game. No big. It's the sort of feedback I'm looking for. I'd like it to be accessible to everyone. :D
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Yeah, the rest of the site functions well as an intro, so that will just help round it out! (Especially with the story arc section :D)
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Re: Precious Memories

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Awesome! :D I knew it was a matter of time before you shrined RF4. It came out awesome ^^
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Re: Precious Memories

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@Robin: Woot! I like the sound of that.

@Mikari: Haha yeah. Seeing as I'm always talking about it on Twitter. Thanks Mikari! :D
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